While I watched the rain come down, I did some editing on a novel for a friend of mine. The particular scene I was working on was great, but something was missing. After a while I figured it out. It was written from the wrong POV.The way she had it written, the words were passive, the action telling instead of showing. I started to wonder if my own scenes I've been stumbling on were written the same way. Something I'll have to check on. Let me give an example.
As it was, Margaret Mitchell wrote the novel all from the POV of Scarlett O'Hara. From her POV it was far more powerful. We felt her anger at having to stay with a woman she didn't like. As a southern belle, she wasn't brought up to be around something so harsh as war. We felt her shock, her dismay to see the south falling around her ears, her disgust of the dying and her horror and fright to think she would have to do it herself. In that scene we still got Dr. Meade's side of things as he snapped at Scarlett that he didn't have any medicine to relieve their suffering.
Which held more power to a reader?
Novels now are usually written through several Points of Views changing sometimes every scene. Try looking over your scenes to see if the drama or action or even romance could be better told their another characters eyes.
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